piskie_writer (piskie_writer) wrote in writers_digest,

Cat Tails 1

This is the first little bit of  children's story I'm working, on so any comments would help.
One hot day in the summer Sarah was lying in the shade beneath a blackberry bush when she saw an odd flying thing. The Thing had what seemed to be round white flower petals sprouting from its small long body and it flew in the most bizarre way. The Thing flew in a zigzag pattern and flitted and fluttered in no particular pattern. It occasionally landed on one of the blackberry flowers surrounding Sarah’s grassy little nook before drunkenly flying away. Entranced, Sarah watched the fluttery Thing as it flew, unable to take her large green eyes off it. Suddenly the Thing flew up out of Sarah’s view...

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